Learning Intention: To use paragraphs to make my writing clearer

To use adverbs to make my writing more powerful

  Courageously in the daylight hours of the sunniest summer day outstanding Olivia was exploring the caves on Whananaki beach, she was the best wild life explorer on earth.

She had explored wild life for about 8 years, now she was 16 when she started working.

    Outstanding Olivia was about 1 meter away from a tiny cave when she heard a snapping noise in the massive cave beside her.

She decided to explore in she walked more and more and more till she found a small river,

Then all of a sudden something big moved something green something scaly!!!!

    The thing in the river jumped out at Olivia!!

    She ran for her life!!

Then she bravely turned to see what was chasing her it was...

 a CROCODILE!!!!!

    Anxiously outstanding Olivia sprinted she turned around again she didn’t look where she was going then all of a sudden she ran smack into the wall of the cave, down she fell it seemed that she was bungee jumping off the sky tower she had fainted.

    Early the next morning outstanding Olivia could faintly hear the footsteps of the crocodile. She thought I thought crocodiles ate people?

      Outstanding Olivia quietly stood up cuffing her hands on her head.

    Then out of nowhere the crocodile came back outstanding Olivia stood there like a statue, up came the crocodile closer closer and closer then he started pulling her out of the cave.

“That’s different” thought outstanding Olivia!

“You’re a nice crocodile” Outstanding Olivia said outstanded

    I think that I’ll take you to the wild life resort and there you can see loads of people, you can have some cool friends your name will be Crocy.

    He nodded with happiness!!!!

Crocy had many friends and lived for a long time!!!